CodaMarine Head Up High
Number of posts : 128 Age : 29 Location : Israel Humor : what do you mean? lol Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Tristania, The Sins of Thy Beloved, Octavia Sperati, Epica, Haggard, After Forever, Ambeon, UnSun, ReVamp, Sirenia Member Points : Registration date : 2010-07-08
| Subject: Yotam's Cave of Creativity Mon Apr 25, 2011 4:42 pm | |
| Well I've been working on creative stuff (Mostly song writing and poetry) from time to time and I thought it might be nice to have your opinions I don't have a natural writing talent nor drawing talents and I'm not really good with metaphors or images so feel free to criticize me as much as your heart desire xD Well here are the 3 short suicidal poems I wrote. They're named Sucide Poems (I,II,III) since I'm not good with names xP... ( Note: I'm not really that suicidal! It does not reflect any of my real current feelings. I just find suicidal, depressive and sad art beautiful and I connect to it somehow) Suicide Poem IEmpty is the room Like the void in my heart Drunk from sorrow And tired of life Last farewell Last goodbye The rope surrounds my neck It's time to die Suicide Poem II
Drowning in gloom Embracing my doom So hollow inside Yet overburdened Salvation is in my hand Aiming towards my head I shall overcome my fears By dawn I will be dead Suicide Poem III
In my solitude Darkness is my only friend But soon life will end Engulfing my death One by one This challenge is not for me I'm done I hope you like them I've wrote some more stuff but I'm not sure if I want to upload them right now so... stay tuned I guess xD | |
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Lady Draconian Pale Enchantress
Number of posts : 20598 Age : 29 Location : England Humor : ( . ) ( . ) Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Tristania, Closterkeller, Van Canto, Seduce The Heaven, Within Temptation Your Band Name : Sea Of Echoes, Carmella's Curse Member Points : Registration date : 2008-07-25
| Subject: Re: Yotam's Cave of Creativity Tue Apr 26, 2011 5:30 pm | |
| They're very melancholic, sad. I understand what you mean that you connect more with sad art, I'm the same. | |
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Mr. Jack Treasure
Number of posts : 6846 Age : 28 Location : Chile Humor : e.e Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Tristania Member Points : Registration date : 2010-08-07
| Subject: Re: Yotam's Cave of Creativity Tue Apr 26, 2011 8:59 pm | |
| I love the first one and you're qrong, it's really difficult to resume feelings in a short poem, that's talent | |
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