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XxfrozenbutterflyxX Treasure
Number of posts : 6329 Location : World of Glass Humor : Cry With A Smile :`) Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Epica,Tristania & Within Temptation Member Points : Registration date : 2009-03-06
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Wed Oct 28, 2009 12:26 pm | |
| Well done,Lizzie,it's beautiful it reminds me a bit of a fairy tale The ending is just epic | |
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Enigma The Escapist
Number of posts : 1495 Age : 30 Location : Where I'm Needed Humor : He he he, Why So Serious? Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Within Temptation and Delain Your Band Name : If i had a good pair of lungs and a band. I suppose we would be called Devils Hand Member Points : Registration date : 2009-06-16
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Wed Oct 28, 2009 5:38 pm | |
| Liz, thats amazing, i love it | |
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Horrible Histories The Heart Of Everything
Number of posts : 4488 Age : 28 Location : Arbeia Humor : Rattus Rattus Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Draconian, Within Temptation, Closterkeller Your Band Name : Hachi Member Points : Registration date : 2009-07-03
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Wed Oct 28, 2009 5:43 pm | |
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Horrible Histories The Heart Of Everything
Number of posts : 4488 Age : 28 Location : Arbeia Humor : Rattus Rattus Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Draconian, Within Temptation, Closterkeller Your Band Name : Hachi Member Points : Registration date : 2009-07-03
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Thu Oct 29, 2009 7:32 pm | |
| I am so bored I have created a new song
I am so bored I have created a new song
My past, My present, my future My heart beckons for my last known love I can't surrender no more the blood that runs cold will freeze I can't take the pain I need to surrender or I die in my heart filled grave
chorus The time has come to hide the rest of my blood it scolds me it holds me it drops me down I thud to the ground for pain keeps on living what will happen with my peace, my love, my purity
harden my thoughts and scold me to death make all my lies fall on ice to leave long lost life in your grave my blood freezes in the midst of my pain for my heart shall break with my last known love it cries a river to hide me
chorus The time has come to hide the rest of my blood it scolds me it holds me it drops me down I thud to the ground for pain keeps on living what will happen with my peace, my love, my purity
I cry so many times I fall on my hands begging to live my life but it kills me more I dream my fairy tale I lose all goodliness for its time to fade away time to lose the day
chorus The time has come to hide the rest of my blood it scolds me it holds me it drops me down I thud to the ground for pain keeps on living what will happen with my peace, my love, my purity
What is happening to me its overwhelmingly great the scars have gone the blood boiling I now can wish again
the glistening of my heart stays so much more I never have to hide again I don't have to bleed again
it all comes back to me, my happiness of the past I have been so blind, the present has never killed me I sing my song again my heart has no rain thank goodness for me
thank goodness I am free | |
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Lady Draconian Pale Enchantress
Number of posts : 20598 Age : 29 Location : England Humor : ( . ) ( . ) Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Tristania, Closterkeller, Van Canto, Seduce The Heaven, Within Temptation Your Band Name : Sea Of Echoes, Carmella's Curse Member Points : Registration date : 2008-07-25
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Thu Oct 29, 2009 7:51 pm | |
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Wyld_stallyon Webmaster
Number of posts : 4659 Age : 29 Location : Peterborough Humor : "I love trigonometry" "Why" "Oh, you know... Just cos" Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Tristania, Nightwish and Within Temptation Member Points : Registration date : 2008-08-12
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Thu Oct 29, 2009 7:52 pm | |
| Wow... Amazing, I love how the last line stands on it's own. It's so powerfull and emtional. | |
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XxfrozenbutterflyxX Treasure
Number of posts : 6329 Location : World of Glass Humor : Cry With A Smile :`) Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Epica,Tristania & Within Temptation Member Points : Registration date : 2009-03-06
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Thu Oct 29, 2009 8:15 pm | |
| One of your very best Lizzie,very touching! | |
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Enigma The Escapist
Number of posts : 1495 Age : 30 Location : Where I'm Needed Humor : He he he, Why So Serious? Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Within Temptation and Delain Your Band Name : If i had a good pair of lungs and a band. I suppose we would be called Devils Hand Member Points : Registration date : 2009-06-16
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Fri Oct 30, 2009 8:59 am | |
| My God, That is the one of greatest things i have ever heard in my life Liz, this is just amazing, i am completely speechless | |
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Horrible Histories The Heart Of Everything
Number of posts : 4488 Age : 28 Location : Arbeia Humor : Rattus Rattus Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Draconian, Within Temptation, Closterkeller Your Band Name : Hachi Member Points : Registration date : 2009-07-03
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Tue Nov 03, 2009 5:36 pm | |
| Wow thank you so much guys and Ryan that is the best thing anyone has said to me in a while thank you New one My single wish is to command your life is to sacrifice your days I shall mesmerize you harden your thoughts but not just me my angel my flower that saves from every destruction my angel my every bleeding heart my love my angel my saver my long lost friend my hope you are there I need to harm you there must be some hope Im not the only one who needs you to take care of me I can't comprehend the nothing my angel my flower that saves me from every destruction my angel my ever bleeding heart my love my angel my saver my long lost friend my hope I wanted for this day to happen oh so long ago it makes me want to cry with laughter with hope I am so happy to kill this is not a mistake my angel my flower that saves me from every destruction my angel my ever bleeding heart my love my angel my saver my long lost friend my hope my angel will save me from you! | |
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Lady Draconian Pale Enchantress
Number of posts : 20598 Age : 29 Location : England Humor : ( . ) ( . ) Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Tristania, Closterkeller, Van Canto, Seduce The Heaven, Within Temptation Your Band Name : Sea Of Echoes, Carmella's Curse Member Points : Registration date : 2008-07-25
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Tue Nov 03, 2009 8:05 pm | |
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Enigma The Escapist
Number of posts : 1495 Age : 30 Location : Where I'm Needed Humor : He he he, Why So Serious? Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Within Temptation and Delain Your Band Name : If i had a good pair of lungs and a band. I suppose we would be called Devils Hand Member Points : Registration date : 2009-06-16
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Tue Nov 03, 2009 8:11 pm | |
| This is just getting amazing on this forum i have seen many poets/song writers but Liz i have to say you take the cake, tayla comes a close second but your like the top song writer on this forum | |
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Horrible Histories The Heart Of Everything
Number of posts : 4488 Age : 28 Location : Arbeia Humor : Rattus Rattus Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Draconian, Within Temptation, Closterkeller Your Band Name : Hachi Member Points : Registration date : 2009-07-03
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Tue Nov 03, 2009 8:43 pm | |
| ohmigosh REALLY? wow thank you so much eeeeeeeee Thank You | |
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Horrible Histories The Heart Of Everything
Number of posts : 4488 Age : 28 Location : Arbeia Humor : Rattus Rattus Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Draconian, Within Temptation, Closterkeller Your Band Name : Hachi Member Points : Registration date : 2009-07-03
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Tue Nov 03, 2009 8:48 pm | |
| Thank you Tay too Hey I have wrote a story I hope it is ok I am very bored you see "Wake up Harriet" shouted my mother from downstairs "do I have to?" I groaned I got up and went downstairs for breakfast, mother was reading her morning paper while drinking her daily cup of tea, she was dressed in her grey suite with her bob sticking out slightly. I wish I could sleep in, it was a cold morning and I really couldn't be bothered to walk to school "mom, could you give me a lift to school I am too tired to walk" I asked "No do you remember I am taking Luke to nursery you know that" she replied "oh right yeah I remember my rotten little brother" she just looked at me. I ran up the stairs I needed to get ready for school, I put my green jumper dress on and my jeans, I needed to be warm. I brushed my hair, did the usuals and legged it out of the door, I couldn't bare to see my mother she looked very stressed I thought I would leave her to it, I got to school, everyone was inside it was to cold to bare, I walked in an felt the warmth of the heaters warm my porcelain skin. I saw my friend Sophie waiting at our usually space she was my only friend I suppose I had plenty but she was the only one. Jealous of her, her blond hair looked gorgeous against her tanned skin an she ha a perfect nose unlike me. "Hey Soph" I smiled "Hey Harriet, hows you?" she asked with a smile "Tired, cold, sniffly but nevertheless happy" I replied "you" "Same old same old really. wow she looks creepy" she said pointing at this girl with pigtails, in a grey duffle coat, with a hello kitty bag. "should we tell her we are in high school?" I asked "Nah, but lets go ask her name" she rushed "Hello, who are you?" Sophie asked in a strange robotic accent, I had to giggle at that "I am Jennie, I am in the 9th grade" she replied We walked away the burst out laughing "She is wearing that and she is in year 10" I laughed "and she thinks she is in America this is England" We laughed but I couldn't really my mother is American thats why she prefers to be called mom "oh no is she staring at me?" I asked very self conscious "oh yeah I think she is ha ha" she replied Im gonna pause there Im having writers block | |
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Lady Draconian Pale Enchantress
Number of posts : 20598 Age : 29 Location : England Humor : ( . ) ( . ) Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Tristania, Closterkeller, Van Canto, Seduce The Heaven, Within Temptation Your Band Name : Sea Of Echoes, Carmella's Curse Member Points : Registration date : 2008-07-25
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Tue Nov 03, 2009 10:52 pm | |
| I like it, great makings of the beginning of an intersting story. Little note though watch out for your punctuation on capital letters, full stops and question marks | |
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Horrible Histories The Heart Of Everything
Number of posts : 4488 Age : 28 Location : Arbeia Humor : Rattus Rattus Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Draconian, Within Temptation, Closterkeller Your Band Name : Hachi Member Points : Registration date : 2009-07-03
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Thu Nov 05, 2009 4:35 pm | |
| Thanks you can tell how crap my english teacher is new song lyrics Lost between the unknown I keep on walking the path of the lost it is so horrible I cannot see who are you? are you from my past Im lost help me find my life chorus do I see my past before my eyes do I crawl in lands of unknown do I hear cries of death all the death I have seen lies in front me but my death has already gone I am in between heaven and hell trying to find my way home I search these paths but Im going in circles I'm lost I cannot hide away from my life and my death I'm dead chorus do I see my past before my eyes do I crawl in lands of unknown do I hear cries of death all the death I have seen lies in front me but my death has already gone I cry at my feet weeping hard as I deceive I want to live but I can't I am already dead stuck between the unknown chorus do I see my past before my eyes do I crawl in lands of unknown do I hear cries of death all the death I have seen lies in front me but my death has already gone Im walking in the unknown I live no longer I see death I see my death I see hell don't make that happen
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Lady Draconian Pale Enchantress
Number of posts : 20598 Age : 29 Location : England Humor : ( . ) ( . ) Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Tristania, Closterkeller, Van Canto, Seduce The Heaven, Within Temptation Your Band Name : Sea Of Echoes, Carmella's Curse Member Points : Registration date : 2008-07-25
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Thu Nov 05, 2009 4:37 pm | |
| You're such a talented writer! Such beauty and emotion carved together And your english teacher is crap | |
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XxfrozenbutterflyxX Treasure
Number of posts : 6329 Location : World of Glass Humor : Cry With A Smile :`) Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Epica,Tristania & Within Temptation Member Points : Registration date : 2009-03-06
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Thu Nov 05, 2009 4:41 pm | |
| LOvely new lyrics Liz,you are getting better and better | |
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Horrible Histories The Heart Of Everything
Number of posts : 4488 Age : 28 Location : Arbeia Humor : Rattus Rattus Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Draconian, Within Temptation, Closterkeller Your Band Name : Hachi Member Points : Registration date : 2009-07-03
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Thu Nov 05, 2009 4:42 pm | |
| Thank you guys although I had to keep editing it the last part kept going bonkers | |
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Enigma The Escapist
Number of posts : 1495 Age : 30 Location : Where I'm Needed Humor : He he he, Why So Serious? Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Within Temptation and Delain Your Band Name : If i had a good pair of lungs and a band. I suppose we would be called Devils Hand Member Points : Registration date : 2009-06-16
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Fri Nov 06, 2009 7:07 pm | |
| Liz, stop getting better, it's getting harder to tell you how great your lyrics are | |
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Wyld_stallyon Webmaster
Number of posts : 4659 Age : 29 Location : Peterborough Humor : "I love trigonometry" "Why" "Oh, you know... Just cos" Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Tristania, Nightwish and Within Temptation Member Points : Registration date : 2008-08-12
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Sat Nov 07, 2009 10:12 am | |
| Really amazing song It's so deep and realyl beautifull. The story is interesting too, but as Tayla said you should watch your punctuation. Still, it's not that important, that's what editors are for xD It's the idea that matters. | |
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Horrible Histories The Heart Of Everything
Number of posts : 4488 Age : 28 Location : Arbeia Humor : Rattus Rattus Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Draconian, Within Temptation, Closterkeller Your Band Name : Hachi Member Points : Registration date : 2009-07-03
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:32 pm | |
| Yeah haha Todd, thanks to you both No LongerI see the storm that rises again the love I cherished has gone again my misery my pain reunites again why have I fallen again I see your death mine so far away your going to die today don't, my heart can cry no more tears for you it cannot bleed for you Chorus I kill everyone I love I can't bleed no longer I don't have feelings no longer I can't forgive no longer I need strength to love again You can't save me, no one can I love you but I can't for I see no future ahead oh how I wished I did but no I can't kill me if you want but you have got to understand I never die but you die everyday Im so lost but no one can find me I drown in my tears but I can't be saved I live for ever longer but I die again I can't die but I feel it bleeding Chorus I kill everyone I love I can't bleed no longer I don't have feelings no longer I can't forgive no longer I need strength to love again You can't save me, no one can I live forever but really who wants to live forever its painful its hell I live everyday but die every second | |
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Lady Draconian Pale Enchantress
Number of posts : 20598 Age : 29 Location : England Humor : ( . ) ( . ) Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Tristania, Closterkeller, Van Canto, Seduce The Heaven, Within Temptation Your Band Name : Sea Of Echoes, Carmella's Curse Member Points : Registration date : 2008-07-25
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Marit The Escapist
Number of posts : 1040 Age : 30 Location : Estonia Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Nightwish, Epica Member Points : Registration date : 2009-07-11
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Sat Nov 07, 2009 3:01 pm | |
| You are a good writer. Nice lyrics. =) | |
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Horrible Histories The Heart Of Everything
Number of posts : 4488 Age : 28 Location : Arbeia Humor : Rattus Rattus Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Draconian, Within Temptation, Closterkeller Your Band Name : Hachi Member Points : Registration date : 2009-07-03
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Fri Nov 20, 2009 4:55 pm | |
| Thank you
Night World Did you ever hear the cries of wolves behind the fog? did you hear the mighty screams of burning witches, being sacrificed? did you here the screams of humans as their blood is sucked?
Chorus There are paths we walk, that others don’t they aren’t human, they are humane but dead inside I cry at the thoughts of their death at my feet it isn’t their fault, that they are beasts it isn’t their fault they are dead.
We aren’t meant to know who they are they live in their little world where they hide Night world They can’t help it but I love them
Chorus There are paths we walk, that others don’t they aren’t human, they are humane but dead inside I cry at the thoughts of their death at my feet it isn’t their fault, that they are beasts it isn’t their fault they are dead.
I want to know why they are my life shall finally be overcome they are my soul my life my love
Chorus There are paths we walk, that others don’t they aren’t human, they are humane but dead inside I cry at the thoughts of their death at my feet it isn’t their fault, that they are beasts it isn’t their fault they are dead.
It isn’t their fault x5
No its not
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EnaGothic Countess Of Midnight
Number of posts : 4752 Age : 592 Location : Dracula's Castle Humor : Bwahahaha Your Favourite Femme Metal Band : Nightwish Member Points : Registration date : 2009-01-02
| Subject: Re: Liz's Lyrics And What-Not Fri Nov 20, 2009 4:57 pm | |
| It sounds cool. Let me guess...Vampires and Witches ?? | |
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